(1) the dialogue
[20:29] Roxanne Kristan: i want to be the writer
[20:29] Phoebe Isenia: pat your forehead
[20:29] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[20:29] Charlotte Mohegan: ok
[20:29] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[20:29] Charlotte Mohegan: I will be the organizor
[20:29] Phoebe Isenia: i think we should speed up
[20:29] Roxanne Kristan: yes
[20:29] Phoebe Isenia: what shoul i be?
[20:29] Charlotte Mohegan: yes!!!!!
[20:30] Phoebe Isenia: so ocean the reader?
[20:30] Phoebe Isenia: and what's left?
[20:30] Charlotte Mohegan: or I will be the editor
[20:30] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[20:30] Phoebe Isenia: and i'm the organizer
[20:31] Phoebe Isenia: ten minute for roxanne's part
[20:31] Roxanne Kristan: any suggestions
[20:32] Charlotte Mohegan: first I think you should have paragraphs
[20:33] Roxanne Kristan: you log in again
[20:33] Roxanne Kristan: i just done that
[20:34] Charlotte Mohegan: ok I got it
[20:34] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe you could add "will" in "DJs talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU"
[20:35] Charlotte Mohegan: Here is my little suggeastion
[20:35] Roxanne Kristan: oh yeah i forget this you guys have mentioned it last week
[20:36] Charlotte Mohegan: maybe you could add your own opinion on these events becuase I merely saw the offical speaking
[20:36] Charlotte Mohegan: some personal thought on them
[20:37] Phoebe Isenia: or you can put yourselves on the readers' side
[20:37] ko525252 Shelter: yes in their shoes~
[20:37] ko525252 Shelter: I don't have ur blog~
[20:37] ko525252 Shelter: sorry~
[20:38] Roxanne Kristan: i got it
[20:38] Phoebe Isenia: three minutes left~
[20:38] Roxanne Kristan: you mean i add more descriptive sentences?
[20:38] Roxanne Kristan: http://roxanne131.blogspot.com/2010/03/pinewave-radio-makes-you-on-air.html
[20:38] ko525252 Shelter: THANKS!!
[20:39] Charlotte Mohegan: that's all
[20:39] Roxanne Kristan: thank you
[20:40] Roxanne Kristan: http://roxanne131.blogspot.com/2010/03/pinewave-radio-makes-you-on-air_23.html
[20:40] Roxanne Kristan: this o ne
[20:40] Roxanne Kristan: ko
[20:40] Charlotte Mohegan: does ko has something to add
[20:40] Charlotte Mohegan: we can wiat for you~
[20:40] ko525252 Shelter: thanks!!
[20:40] ko525252 Shelter: u guys can go on~
[20:40] Phoebe Isenia: or what reasons that these two programms will attract students
[20:41] ko525252 Shelter: I will add after reading~
[20:41] Phoebe Isenia: and what results do the pinewave workers expect to get from these two projects
[20:41] Phoebe Isenia: ok
[20:41] Phoebe Isenia: then let's move on the last one!!
(2) a summary of the reader’s and the editor's SUGGESTED REVISIONS
One suggested revision is about grammar that the writer has to add “will” to one of the sentences to make the tense more integrated. The other is about content that the writer could add her own opinion to the two programs and step on readers’ shoes, adding what reasons make the programs attract students in NCU and what results do Pinewave workers expect to get from these.
(3) a brief comment on the entire article with respect to organization, length, logic, and style.
I think the main idea of the news is very close to us and clear. The writer is like broadcast an advertisement but she add the official speaking that really make this news valuable and persuasive. In the first paragraph, the introduction is clear. In the following two paragraphs, the writer respectively give more details to each program that can make readers understand step by step. The concluding paragraph is trying to catching readers’ attention.
2010年3月24日 星期三
Pinewave Radio makes you on the air (revised version)
Pinewave Radio makes you on the air
The two new programes of Pinewave Radio this semester allow every student to show themselves
Pinewave Radio has a whole new style which is very different from before this semester. Now, every student of National Central University has a chance to be on the air, sharing their thoughts, opinions, voices as well.There are two special programs which have interaction with the audience. One is called Gossip in NCU, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in odd numbers week. The other is called Fighting Here, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in even numbers week.
In Gossip in NCU, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs will talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
Fighting Here is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents for singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
These programes aim to build a closer connection between Pinewave Radio and the sudents of NCU so the staff of Pinewave Radio are all fired up for advertisement. Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
The two new programes of Pinewave Radio this semester allow every student to show themselves
Pinewave Radio has a whole new style which is very different from before this semester. Now, every student of National Central University has a chance to be on the air, sharing their thoughts, opinions, voices as well.There are two special programs which have interaction with the audience. One is called Gossip in NCU, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in odd numbers week. The other is called Fighting Here, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in even numbers week.
In Gossip in NCU, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs will talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
Fighting Here is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents for singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
These programes aim to build a closer connection between Pinewave Radio and the sudents of NCU so the staff of Pinewave Radio are all fired up for advertisement. Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
2010年3月23日 星期二
Pinewave Radio makes you on the air
Pinewave Radio has a whole new style which is very different from before this semester. Now, every student of National Central University has a chance to be on the air, sharing their thoughts, opinions, voices as well.There are two special programs which have interaction with the audience. One is called “校園E周刊”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in odd numbers week. The other is called “決戰雙連坡”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in even numbers week.
In 校園E周刊, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
決戰雙連坡 is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents in singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
In 校園E周刊, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
決戰雙連坡 is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents in singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
2010年3月16日 星期二
2010年3月15日 星期一
news draft
Pinewave Radio has a whole new style which is very different from before this semester. Now, every student of National Central University has a chance to be on the air, sharing their thoughts, opinions, voices as well.
There are two special programs which have interaction with the audience. One is called “校園E周刊”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in odd numbers week. The other is called “決戰雙連坡”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in even numbers week.
In 校園E周刊, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
決戰雙連坡 is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents in singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
There are two special programs which have interaction with the audience. One is called “校園E周刊”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in odd numbers week. The other is called “決戰雙連坡”, which will be broadcasted on Wednesday night in even numbers week.
In 校園E周刊, there will be seven topics on alternative Wednesday. DJs talk about many hot topics and the interesting gossip in NCU. Also, they will go street interviewing if the topic needs to. “Well~Our program aims to satisfy your needs for gossip and interesting topic, so I really do hope you all like it, and if not, please leave your comment on the website. You are welcomed to give us suggestions which drives us to the next level. Thanks for listening, anyway. J” the headquarters, Jess Lin said.
決戰雙連坡 is a singing contest on the air for NCU students to show their talents in singing. “To be well-connected with the campus and students, Pinewave Radio decided to make a program which all the members in NCU can get involved. As a result, the singing competition was born. This competition is not only for singing, but gives students an opportunity to become campus stars. So, let's just wait and see who will become the super star in NCU!” the headquarters, Alvin said.
Next time when you are bored in the dorm, just turn on the pinewave radio (http://radio.pinewave.tw), you will definitely have a wonderful night you have ever had!
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